Title: Davids Challenge ~ Behind Closed Eyes of Mine | |
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Zydha | |
Date Posted:06-10-2020 12:44Copy HTML BEHIND CLOSED EYES of MINE
Look at her, just behind the eyes Is a space of dreams and solitude. A very private place, where she flies To far off lands filled with fantasies. Clear sounding streams trickle In soothing harmony. As she sits, flowers turn her way Saying 'Tread gently 'pon Our softness underfoot' This is a healing place Full of wisened trees who know When she has taken her fill, Then, they whisper 'It is time to awaken' This she does willingly In knowledge that she needs Only Once more close her eyes
You cannot see it? Then look closer
For ... I am there.
(c) ZYDHA HART 2005 (This is an oldie, David, one which I take to heart, that, does anyone really know me) Opposites exist by virtue of each other
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potleek | Share to: #1 |
Re:Davids Challenge ~ Behind Closed Eyes of Mine Date Posted:07-10-2020 07:50Copy HTML Zy self is the only one that truly knows self, others see what they want to see,
Disregarding some of the little imperfections.
But when you close your eyes it seems a pleasant mystical place you reside in...Tony (potleek)
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Zydha | Share to: #2 |
Re:Davids Challenge ~ Behind Closed Eyes of Mine Date Posted:07-10-2020 08:55Copy HTML I have a piece somewhere called 'I am my own best friend', Tony, and it is an honest write in the sense of exactly what you said...noone can get the essence of me, but that's ok, I know myself and what actually makes me tick, and... I'm quite quick to recognise my faults, so I'd change whatever I felt I needed to, thanks for reading, Les Opposites exist by virtue of each other
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Deezee43 | Share to: #3 |
Re:Davids Challenge ~ Behind Closed Eyes of Mine Date Posted:10-10-2020 10:16Copy HTML Another of your hauntingly fragile poems, Les, written with a magical softness. Your love of flowers comes through in this piece, but it's more than that; it's needing a safe place to which you can "escape", and that is the saddest part of your poem, that you need "that" place. You don't need to change anything; just need to be understood, as you are. Dx Could do with a glass of rosé!
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Zydha | Share to: #4 |
Re:Davids Challenge ~ Behind Closed Eyes of Mine Date Posted:11-10-2020 12:11Copy HTML Thanks David, yes, there's nothing to change...I have always had my special place, a place where I can slopey shoulder the derogatives and rest amongst my flowers and all things peaceful. We should all have a place to go, the world can be difficult, Les x Opposites exist by virtue of each other
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