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Zydha
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Date Posted:06-10-2020 12:44Copy HTML

BEHIND CLOSED EYES of MINE

 

Look at her, just behind the eyes

Is a space of dreams and solitude.

A very private place, where she flies

To far off lands filled with fantasies.

Clear sounding streams trickle

In soothing harmony.

As she sits, flowers turn her way

Saying 'Tread gently 'pon

Our softness underfoot'

This is a healing place

Full of wisened trees who know

When she has taken her fill,

Then, they whisper

'It is time to awaken'

This she does willingly

In knowledge that she needs

Only

Once more close her eyes 

 

You cannot see it?

Then look closer

 

For ... I am  there.

 

(c)  ZYDHA HART 2005

(This is an oldie, David, one which I take to heart, that, does anyone really know me)


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Re:Davids Challenge ~ Behind Closed Eyes of Mine

Date Posted:07-10-2020 07:50Copy HTML

Zy self is the only one that truly knows self, others see what they want to see, Disregarding some of the little imperfections. But when you close your eyes it seems a pleasant mystical place you reside in...Tony (potleek)
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Re:Davids Challenge ~ Behind Closed Eyes of Mine

Date Posted:07-10-2020 08:55Copy HTML


I have a piece somewhere called 'I am my own best friend', Tony, and it is an honest write

in the sense of exactly what you said...noone can get the essence of me, but that's ok,

I know myself and what actually makes me tick, and... I'm quite quick to recognise my faults, 

so I'd change whatever I felt I needed to,  thanks for reading, Les


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Re:Davids Challenge ~ Behind Closed Eyes of Mine

Date Posted:10-10-2020 10:16Copy HTML

Another of your hauntingly fragile poems, Les, written with a magical softness. Your love of flowers comes through in this piece, but it's more than that; it's needing a safe place to which you can "escape", and that is the saddest part of your poem, that you need "that" place. 

You don't need to change anything; just need to be understood, as you are.


Dx 

Could do with a glass of rosé!
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Re:Davids Challenge ~ Behind Closed Eyes of Mine

Date Posted:11-10-2020 12:11Copy HTML


Thanks David, yes, there's nothing to change...I have always had my special place, 

a place where I can slopey shoulder the derogatives and rest amongst my flowers and

all things peaceful. We should all have a place to go, the world can be difficult, Les x


 

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