Title: Deezee's Challenge - Doubt | |
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sachasuzanne27 | |
Date Posted:10-10-2020 08:29Copy HTML Where do I start My ability I doubt My looks have escaped My expectation is to fail My mind thinks I might know But my doubt kicks in again My days of walking the catwalk My place as Carnival Princess x 3 My ability to get a dinner date My ability to wear anything But my thoughts again instilled doubt My next milestone is 60 My mind is frustrated My body is debilitated My lack of conviction is annoying But that is what I would change My doubt to be eradicated Although I doubt it would happen!
© sachasuzanne 2020 Gym? oh damn, thought you said Gin!
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Zydha | Share to: #1 |
Re:Deezee's Challenge - Doubt Date Posted:10-10-2020 10:32Copy HTML I was surprised to find these words for Dads challenge, Sacha, such negativity which I do see from time to time but in this you say it with a positive lack of 'self confidence' people would not believe you possess when they mix with you. You don't see all that is good and the many pluses you have in your favour, your achievements, your daughter, your career and indeed your life in general, but since we are only Tony and Dad and I...all I can say is that this is a surprising composition which can only be written within such a close group... it will be interesting to hear what the others have to say, Mum x Opposites exist by virtue of each other
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Deezee43 | Share to: #2 |
Re:Deezee's Challenge - Doubt Date Posted:10-10-2020 11:20Copy HTML Sacha, I think you're doing yourself an injustice, in fact, I know you are. Most women your age look a generation older than you, and you know this. Catwalk models and carnival princesses have to leave their teens behind, along with their first loves and teenage crushes, but you don't have to forget them; that's just a part of growing up. Sometimes people come into your life and plant seeds that cause one to doubt one's self. It can be difficult to shake off these feelings, but I know there is so much more to you than the doubts expressed in this poem. Don't put yourself down, girl, there's so much more to you than the sum of your parts!!! dad x Could do with a glass of rosé!
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potleek | Share to: #3 |
Re:Deezee's Challenge - Doubt Date Posted:11-10-2020 08:19Copy HTML Sacha seeing that I don't know you personally, it's difficult for me to even give a comment that would be very meaning to you.
Take a good look at the ladies you meet and see, I know you'd probably say "I wouldn't be seen dead wearing that." The thing is people (men included) wear whatever they like these days. Go for it.
Doubt, sure we all have that, that's what makes us take the road we take and we even get a chance to go back and change it.
But I think your Mum and Dad have said what means more to you...Tony (potleek)
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Zydha | Share to: #4 |
Re:Deezee's Challenge - Doubt Date Posted:12-10-2020 12:23Copy HTML After a chat about the doubting context of your write, Sacha, it became apparent that you were simply stating how you or many folk can feel regardless of accomplishments etc. Unfortunately, we still have to conquer those depleting characteristics, or they can take over, a nice step into a lesser used part of our consciousness....poetry is great for allowing us that freedom, Mum x Opposites exist by virtue of each other
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sachasuzanne27 | Share to: #5 |
Re:Deezee's Challenge - Doubt Date Posted:13-10-2020 08:41Copy HTML ahhh bless you all for lovely responses. Mum and Dad you know me, so the references to the past make sense and yes, of course I am indeed delighted and proud of Charli and my accomplishments, and my family. Needless to say, the great time I had growing up living and going to school in all the different countries, what we have seen -awesome!It was more about my personal frustration at my 'lack of'. The element of doubt is a flaw in my character and it has indeed held me back from 'going for it', also held me back from dealing with certain profound situations differently, and sadly we cant go back and change those moments Tony, as much as I would love to, lol. But I do lack a simple amount of 'self confidence' and in a world where 'effort' is rewarded as much as 'results' ... I notice more how much I could have achieved without the 'lack of'. Your comments were very gentle and supportive - thank you :) x |