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potleek
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Date Posted：28-09-2014 09:44Copy HTML The Last Of The Ancients Ever since I can remember as a child I had always been fascinated with things that flew, from kites, balloons and finally into aeroplanes, I was born in a quiet little town in mid America, in fact you could call it a one-horse town. I had my pilots licence as soon as I was old enough, so it was no wonder that I came to earn my living flying. Not as a high jet fighter pilot or an airline pilot jetting off to all parts of the world but more as a kind of all round pilot, sometimes carrying a couple of passengers here and there but on the most parts carrying cargo to all parts of the country and on odd occasions a little further. I had tried to follow in my father’s footsteps to become a doctor, I went to medical school for three years but the freedom of the skies was to much of a pull for me and when I got the chance to buy a good sound aeroplane with prospects I went for it. I have a partner Bob Johnson who was just as fanatical about flying as I am, not just the flying part but also the mechanics of the whole thing. Some how we were like magnets that had pulled each other together and now we were firmly stuck together. We both had our own planes for the job but both had been changed and modified so much that they were no longer the machines that they started out as.
Time is the most precious thing we have, but we are the poorer if we can't spend a little time on a friend
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Zydha
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Re：Last Of The Ancients Date Posted：28-09-2014 10:02Copy HTML Oh, I want to enjoy this, Tony, and am sure I will, but having started it,
the light is not good (David watching tv  )so tomorrow I will get comfy by daylight, Zy Opposites exist by virtue of each other
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Druid_girl
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Re：Last Of The Ancients Date Posted：29-09-2014 12:17Copy HTML I read this from beginning to end...you are definitely number one in my book for story telling...thank you for sharing a most wonderful adventure...I will have to return to read this tale again and again.
Tony, I think you're the best as a story teller.  Mariaxx    "Life without God is like an unsharpened pencil - it has no point."
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Zydha
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Re：Last Of The Ancients Date Posted：29-09-2014 11:18Copy HTML  If anyone is thinking of picking up a book...don't!!! Read Tony's story...it's brilliantly written.Tony, you have surpassed all previous writes with this one...I truely enjoyed every step of this adventurous journey, what innovation and improvisation you used, one would believe you had had some experience at least of the beginnings of the mishaps and their outcome...take a bow, Sir, and why not try this at some publishing group for short stories. A very enjoyable accompaniment with my cup of tea, thanks, Zy Opposites exist by virtue of each other
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potleek
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Re：Last Of The Ancients Date Posted：29-09-2014 05:28Copy HTML Maria thank you for reading and commenting
I'm glad that you enjoyed it enough to say that you will return to read it again. I think we are all equal in our writing stories, it's just that we write about different things in a different way. But I do thank you for the very kind compliment...Tony (potleek)
Time is the most precious thing we have, but we are the poorer if we can't spend a little time on a friend
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potleek
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Re：Last Of The Ancients Date Posted：29-09-2014 05:38Copy HTML Zy you are equally kind to me with your comment.
I've had this story on the back burner since 2009, I've always said. "What's the point of writing it if nobody ever gets to read it." Well! I think it is time it was read, by how many....who knows. As for publishing, I've thought about it a few times in the past but never got beyond that. But who knows, perhaps one day. So once again, thanks for the kind words...Tony (potleek)
Time is the most precious thing we have, but we are the poorer if we can't spend a little time on a friend
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Zydha
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Re：Last Of The Ancients Date Posted：29-09-2014 07:22Copy HTML Tony, as you probably already know, I started writing at 9 years old, most definately for the next few years for myself alone, but by 15 I had widened my folder to more general genres and short stories and started sending to magazines (of that time) and for a few years, I had poetry and short stories accepted by a few, including the Womans Own, Peoples Friend and Readers Digest. Payment was in Guineas, lol, sometimes 2 sometimes 5.....a fortune over half a century ago.
I tell you this because I wrote fundamentally for my own satisfaction and college and then married life become the main interests of my mind and time...but then came the old beeb board about 15 years ago which was my toe in cyberspace and sharing with like-minded writers, then MSN and now Aimoo and I agree, it is fantastic to touch others with your work, but you could touch so many more with work of this standard, I am certain of it and the book link I have just reposted is just the tool to find that opening. Though, I do have a habit of shooting myself in the foot, Tony, lol, for I have encouraged a few members in the past to seek publication and they do...and then... they vanish from the group, understandably, Zy Opposites exist by virtue of each other
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Deezee43
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Re：Last Of The Ancients Date Posted：29-09-2014 11:01Copy HTML Hi, Tony,
I have every intention of reading this story of yours, for I have enjoyed everything you have posted in the story section so far, but time has been against me recently and I am still trying to get something finished before Corinne's challenge is, haha. I shall be returning to it at a better hour of the day (or night) as I have heard all about it from Les, but just having a quick catch up at the moment, I'd rather sit back and enjoy it at my leisure, David Could do with a glass of rosé!
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Re：Last Of The Ancients Date Posted：01-10-2014 08:43Copy HTML Hi, Tony,
at last, I have had time to sit back and enjoy this read, Tony, great work, wondering if you had to do much research. Les is right, even if you do feel you can improve on it, (we can do that every time we go back to something). I was actually disappointed to come to the end, but as with your usual tales, you left me completely satisfied, David (I won't repeat all Les has said, but I do feel the same about the quality of your writing) Could do with a glass of rosé!
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potleek
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Re：Last Of The Ancients Date Posted：01-10-2014 09:20Copy HTML David thank you for coming back to this one.
I didn't have to do any research at all in writing this, I had thought of saying what kind of plane it was but then left it up to the readers imagination to fill that in. The rest came from inside my head. In a way I don't think I would improve on this one, writing is often like painting, sometimes the more you play about with it, you muck it up and lose what you're trying to get at. I have been told that I should show more and not tell, but so many good stories are spoilt by filling pages up with useless words that don't really add to the story. I kind of like to tell it the way I see and feel it and pull the reader along with me. As for the ending, the knowledge of what he had seen had to stop with the people he needed to protect. But once again thanks for reading and commenting...Tony (potleek)
Time is the most precious thing we have, but we are the poorer if we can't spend a little time on a friend
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Zydha
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Re：Last Of The Ancients Date Posted：01-10-2014 09:59Copy HTML Hy, Tony, I knew that David was reading your story and now I get to read what he thought of it, lol
but we chatted a bit about it when he'd finished...yes, your ending was the necessary closure, but what we were saying was that you are like a good book and sometimes when one has time to sit and read and enjoy, it is over too soon, not the story, just the journey, if that makes sense. And actually, when we are more free with time, we thought we'd like to print off some of your stories, Tony, just to have at hand whenever we have hours to enjoy (like the forthcoming six hour sail back to Devon next week) ... an opportune period but without laptop at hand, (not to mention, the day and half's drive up the whole of France, well, I'll just be the passenger, ) ZyOpposites exist by virtue of each other
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potleek
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Re：Last Of The Ancients Date Posted：02-10-2014 01:21Copy HTML Zy I understand what you are saying, I sometime wonder if I had the ability to write a much longer story.
Short stories seem to be no bother at times, (I'm not saying they come easy) I get the start middle and ending and in no time at all it is the end. Now that's the nicest compliment anyone could pay me. Printing off some of my stories for a more leisurely read, I thank you. I do hope your forth coming trip will be an easy one and a more fruitful one...Tony (potleek)
Time is the most precious thing we have, but we are the poorer if we can't spend a little time on a friend
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Zydha
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Re：Last Of The Ancients Date Posted：02-10-2014 01:42Copy HTML Thanks, Tony, I'd hoped you wouldn't mind if we did that....by the time one scoots around the forums,
it's easy enough to keep up with the stories one by one, and read back over others when there's time, but, how nice to have an anthology of yours to read whilest sitting in one place for six hours or so and of course, there's the car journey, so thanks again, and yes, let's hope so, Zy Opposites exist by virtue of each other
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