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Zydha
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Date Posted：22-10-2015 04:21Copy HTML Life’s Enigma How to fill an empty, vacant space Where once a bed of roses lay As now, the thorns just jab my face. To run a never ending race whilst games impose on us each day How to fill an empty, vacant space. Is this the way to keep life’s pace With one piece missing all the way As now, the thorns just jab my face. Who to blame for the misplace Of words, no longer on display, How to fill an empty, vacant space. Life’s enigma can deface And rules of loving fade away As now, the thorns just jab my face How to fill an empty, space So hollow and reminding me Of the euphoric memory As now, the thorns just jab my face. © Zydha Hart 2013 Opposites exist by virtue of each other
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mikhail44
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Re：Life's Enigma (villanelle) Date Posted：22-10-2015 04:49Copy HTML ow - this feels like a hurt on a hurt - the metaphorical 'jab my face' just feels so painful it surpasses some of the more guresome descriptions of hurt
the hurt of lonliness of longing of missing things one jus misses - like hugs and kisses - and of course aging - which some days can be a hurt all by itself well done Les best, m |
potleek
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Re：Life's Enigma (villanelle) Date Posted：22-10-2015 05:00Copy HTML Zy this speaks so much to me of a missing partner, but in the 4th stanza it speaks of words not on display, could be poems or stories not posted so much that thorns just jab the face...Tony (potleek)
Time is the most precious thing we have, but we are the poorer if we can't spend a little time on a friend
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Druid_girl
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Re：Life's Enigma (villanelle) Date Posted：22-10-2015 05:49Copy HTML Thorns prickle my skin
When death comes sorrow begins Now I sink or swim My Haiku for Halloween...I loved your poem. Well done, dahling. Mariaxx "Life without God is like an unsharpened pencil - it has no point."
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Zydha
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Re：Life's Enigma (villanelle) Date Posted：22-10-2015 09:40Copy HTML Aahhh, Tony, thanks for taking the time to wonder about this villanelle; which as you initially sensed,
was just a passing thought from somewhere about a broken relationship, the thorns are simply demonstrative of pain, 4th stanza, 'of words no longer on display'... (words no longer visible, such as 'sounds' of loving, silence even). I am frequently inspired from a magazine, newspaper or a tv show or film, anything at all....Zy Opposites exist by virtue of each other
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Zydha
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Re：Life's Enigma (villanelle) Date Posted：22-10-2015 09:45Copy HTML Dear, dear Maria, lol, I thank you for enjoying my villanelle, but if your Haiku is for Halloween,
would it not be best posted in the Halloween Haiku thread?  since it is so admirably suitable, Zy xOpposites exist by virtue of each other
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Zydha
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Re：Life's Enigma (villanelle) Date Posted：22-10-2015 10:00Copy HTML Yes, Mikhail, the villanelle rhyming and line repetition can be a little obscuring, but you read me well,
the proverbial 'bed of roses' is emptied by one half of a one time loving relationship, whilest the other is left to lay amidst the painful and reminding (metaphorical) thorns, glad you liked my 'turn of phrase', thanks, Les Opposites exist by virtue of each other
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Druid_girl
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Re：Life's Enigma (villanelle) Date Posted：23-10-2015 02:04Copy HTML Ah ya! Foiled again. I know, the halloween theme on your screen makes me feel more into the spirit. I know, it is more suitable. Just wanted to share something off the top of my head. It came to me, like one of your instantaneous writes. I thought it might suit the mood. Not to worry, I will try to remember which board I am on next time.
Mariaxx "Life without God is like an unsharpened pencil - it has no point."
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