|
|
| Title: The Trip Through The Mountains | |
| bbcpoetrycorner > Our Writers Nook; Members Stories and More > Our Members Stories (Around 500 Words or more) | Go to subcategory： |
| Author | Content |
potleek
|
|
|
Date Posted：10-04-2016 08:35Copy HTML
The Trip through the Mountains There were quite a few people on the bus going over the mountains, perhaps they were going for pleasure or for business or whatever but everyone settled down for the long trip. The bus slowly wound its way up the narrow road, the weather soon changed from brilliant sunshine to clouds of mist that the bus drove in and out of but after a while that changed again to a complete blanket of mist that made it almost impossible to see through. Suddenly the bus careered over the side of the road and bumped its way down a steep slope bouncing the passengers around amongst screams and shouts until it came to a sudden stop, everything went quiet then I heard a few moans and people shouting, the
Time is the most precious thing we have, but we are the poorer if we can't spend a little time on a friend
|
|
Druid_girl
|
Share to:
#1
|
|
Re：The Trip Through The Mountains Date Posted：10-04-2016 06:31Copy HTML Wow, the story brought chills to my spine. I never imagined what was happening till I reached the end. Wonderful accounting. I enjoyed it and couldn't stop till I reached the end. Thanks for your story, I always am amazed at your outcome. Maria (druidgirl) "Life without God is like an unsharpened pencil - it has no point."
|
Zydha
|
Share to:
#2
|
|
Re：The Trip Through The Mountains Date Posted：12-04-2016 03:45Copy HTML Loved it, Tony, kinda got it, but only towards the very end, and since am short of time...
I had mixed feelings that it was a short one as I would have liked a bit more of the ambiance but you reached the final destination well,  much enjoyed, thanks, Tony, ZyOpposites exist by virtue of each other
|
|
potleek
|
Share to:
#3
|
|
Re：The Trip Through The Mountains Date Posted：13-04-2016 07:26Copy HTML Zy glad you found the time to read, sorry about the length but real short stories seem to be all I can manage just now.
I thought you might twig it (I think there is another story you missed earlier on). But take your time there is much to catch up on...Tony (potleek)
Time is the most precious thing we have, but we are the poorer if we can't spend a little time on a friend
|
|
potleek
|
Share to:
#4
|
|
Re：The Trip Through The Mountains Date Posted：13-04-2016 07:28Copy HTML Maria thank you also for taking the time to read and comment. It would have spoilt it if you knew the result earlier...Tony (potleek)
Time is the most precious thing we have, but we are the poorer if we can't spend a little time on a friend
|
|
Zydha
|
Share to:
#5
|
|
Re：The Trip Through The Mountains Date Posted：13-04-2016 08:24Copy HTML Don't apologise about the length, Tony, the shorter the better for our time schedule at the mo',
but I have to admit the longer the better for really getting into with your clever scenarios, Zy Opposites exist by virtue of each other
|
