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| Title: Junie - Pale Blue Gaze - Flaxen Ringlets; By .....Mikhail | |
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Zydha
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Date Posted：04-06-2015 11:22Copy HTML
julie junie - entered sanctimonious layer as she sashay - in harmony - up the stair - with - - - - - - - self self met julie when - when through lace toile she loved - satin gloves - hovered above kingdom’s grace why - why did they meet - why did she not fly - before - meeting - self she was the next to enter - - heaven - the next - next to seven - the next - to find - - - - - - - her home she moaned a time before - she stoked and so much more - so much more - left far north of true love’s amour but so close close to the cold - immersed in ice - drenched in crystal meth’s secret satin soft-ness - slid so close to the crack-coke’s dreams - so so close to riding that brown-heroin screams but oh sweet jesus - oh sweet god - oh all that pain - be gone
wasn’t it? did i say that? oh to ease off the ache - i had to fake-a-few - it wasn’t long - i was all strong - they weren’t nothin - nuthin - but johns it didn’t hurt - they were the losers - and - and - i - was - strong - all along remember what mum said - it don’t matter none - yer looks‘ll get ya what ya need - girl - girl she never hurt - so i learned - i wasn’t gonna hurt either - ha yeah - so it cost me a little jail time - huh - time in pantomime - time to rest - waitin to be blessings - ha - blessed by the fools peddlin that ol’ salvation bamboozle oh yeah there was daak times too - mmmmm yah - there was - but - oooo the buzz - drew me out of it - kept me waaaaaaarm - alllllllll night - alllllllll tight - filled me with - - - - - - - love - it was love wasn’t it? oh-fool - it was julie junie - entered sanctimonious layer as she sashay - in harmony - up the stair - with - - - - - - - self self met julie when - when through lace toile she loved - satin gloves - hovered above kingdom’s grace why - why did they meet - why did she not fly - before - meeting - self she was the next to enter - - heaven - the next - next to seven - the next - to find - - - - - - - her home junie - pale blue gaze - flaxen ringlets warm best, m Opposites exist by virtue of each other
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Re：Junie - Pale Blue Gaze - Flaxen Ringlets; By .....Mikhail Date Posted：27-06-2015 10:42Copy HTML A deep write, Mikhail, but such powerful imagery! I felt each and every word!
I love the way you've woven it into a narrative - and it's almost as if the story tells itself! A fantastic write (and one which I think deserves more than one read, so I'll be back again later.)!   Stand tall in the face of adversity
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mikhail44
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Re：Junie - Pale Blue Gaze - Flaxen Ringlets; By .....Mikhail Date Posted：27-06-2015 11:37Copy HTML ah dear Sunshine - thank you for boosting this upward - i thought it was so convoluted - or - so risky in todays pc world this would ingraciously slide down the chart - ah - but then - you are too clever Sunshine Girl - and - i very much appreciate it
ya - this is a sketchy story of - well - drugs and 'fallen' women - i could have picked a fallen man just as easily - but then my muse is female and she picks most of the time since she is far more clever than i am this isn't a pleasent story either - not one that slides down the throat easily - nope - this one has pickers and hooks - and barbs like the schistosomiasis worm that stick and poke at 'goodness' in the world as we know it or want it to be - this digs into the nasty parts of life we don't want to be around though we know it is around - everywhere and finally - oh my - dare i - even hint that a 'fallen women' could be waiting to enter heaven - oh oh oh oh oh - now that's sticking my neck out far too far - isn't it? thank you so very much Sunshine for giving me the opportunity to talk about this one - it is a controversy within a conumdrum stacked on a taboo with a peccadillo cherry on top - just what my muse orders up from time to time ah well - life thanks again Sunshine, m |
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Re：Junie - Pale Blue Gaze - Flaxen Ringlets; By .....Mikhail Date Posted：28-06-2015 12:07Copy HTML ah - one more thing - this one is not one of my proudest writes either - maybe it slid down because it's not too good
if so i'm very sorry for my rant best forgiveness, m |
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Re：Junie - Pale Blue Gaze - Flaxen Ringlets; By .....Mikhail Date Posted：28-06-2015 11:24Copy HTML Thank you for your synopsis on this piece, Mikhail, I have returned to it a few times and have to admit;
your muse had me flumixed...bits I got but the general gist evaded me and now, I can read it again with greater understanding. I'm certain you'd prefer no comment to an empty one... as I was still trying to understand bits of it. But...the fallen woman entering the gates of heaven as she was, seemed too far out so I questioned 'my' lack of comprehension. Intricately convaluting, Mikhail, but now, I have again read and thoroughly enjoyed, thanks, Les Opposites exist by virtue of each other
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Re：Junie - Pale Blue Gaze - Flaxen Ringlets; By .....Mikhail Date Posted：28-06-2015 01:44Copy HTML hy Les - thanks very much for taking this one on for comment - i admit freely it's not very good - though the emotions run high with this stuff - wasted lives - people selling themselves or getting sold in the name of anything - bothers me - especially when greed, non-caring - abuse - drugs - and actual or pseudo-slavery is involved - without question my muse was and is on a rant
and i apologise for this with regret, m |
